So I know I already asked this but...?
I really need more peoples opinion so... Please review my poem.
Constructive criticism is very much appreciated!
Title: Stupid Teen Angst
B-F-F,
Is what we both thought,
Friends forever,
You and Me,
But swiftly he come,
And that’s where it’s sad,
A fantasy world,
Is too much to ask,
Love is blind,
And ignorance bliss,
Gauntlets thrown,
Stabbed within the back,
Lies fly from lips,
Petty words fall,
A strong friendship destroyed,
Over a boy.
Answers: It's really moral! There's nothing much to criticize, only thing I'd right to be heard is; I wish you had added more detail, the poem ended too with alacrity for me. I would have liked you to describe how you felt or something.=]
it's a honest poem. really good, although i think you should play around with the wording of the title, because it give off this impression that it's one of those stupid-cliquey little poems. you can pick out some really strong points from your poem, or use one world that can sum it all up. adjectives in all, good poem!
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Constructive criticism is very much appreciated!
Title: Stupid Teen Angst
B-F-F,
Is what we both thought,
Friends forever,
You and Me,
But swiftly he come,
And that’s where it’s sad,
A fantasy world,
Is too much to ask,
Love is blind,
And ignorance bliss,
Gauntlets thrown,
Stabbed within the back,
Lies fly from lips,
Petty words fall,
A strong friendship destroyed,
Over a boy.
Answers: It's really moral! There's nothing much to criticize, only thing I'd right to be heard is; I wish you had added more detail, the poem ended too with alacrity for me. I would have liked you to describe how you felt or something.=]
it's a honest poem. really good, although i think you should play around with the wording of the title, because it give off this impression that it's one of those stupid-cliquey little poems. you can pick out some really strong points from your poem, or use one world that can sum it all up. adjectives in all, good poem!
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