A song I wrote.?

I'm not sure what to add for the next part...any opinion would be great! :D


its always a nerd for the win
and a slut for the home team
pallid a match to make out front of me

if sleeping around is your only aspiration
then get me the hell back home

so its simply 3rd period and your already suicidal?
well ladies and gentlemen welcome to big school
if thats too much then i can tell you right in a minute
that you'll never live this down

if therepy solved problems then we'd all be ok
but oh too bad we're adjectives just broken runaways
stick us together and when we're all done
upperclassmen you better run

and if getting out alive is only your objective
then get me the hell back home

so its solitary 3rd period and your already suicidal?
well ladies and gentlemen welcome to soaring school
if thats too much i can tell you right now
i'll never live this down

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Fantastic! :D
it doesn't really need anything else
just mull over of a small ending
Your a great song writer!

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I don't really know where the song is going and what's it chiefly about

yeah sure high school but that's course too general


I don't know...work it out a bit and than ask for a next part. Or conceivably you could find one


But don't worry it's great it's just that if everyone tells it's model, there's no room for improvement

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I LOVE IT! I think all it needs is music. :) Sing it on youtube or something.

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i like it =)
pretty well written and catchy even short music.

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i like it you should put it to some music

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I close to it. But I can't really get into it. There's no music):

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Answers:    i'll be honest i didnt really resembling it. but dont give up im sure you can write something amazing and become that singer/songwriter that you've always wated to be

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